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Adenn'verd Ijanya

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P.D.C. Commando Comments
« on: April 14, 2010, 11:45:22 PM »
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Re: P.D.C. Commando Comments
« Reply #1 on: April 15, 2010, 02:28:20 AM »
Post any comments you have on my fanfic here :D Negative feedback helps with improving it too, you know :P

What is a P.D.C commando?   (edit: Ah.  Planetary Defense Corps)

Your writing has a very kinetic high-energy level to it, but as yet I'm kind of at a loss as to what is actually going on.  What context? Yeah, I have some names of some people... soliders of some kind.  And there's a terrorist organization that is more powerful than a national military...

and that's it, really.  

It could do with a bit more exposition.
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Re: P.D.C. Commando Comments
« Reply #2 on: April 15, 2010, 01:59:25 PM »
Well, the BlueStar was hiding in the mountains (somewhere), and we're just gearing up for war for about........ 50 years, giving them time to get ready. After they were finally demolished, some of it's former members went to do the same as they had done before, but for a WAY longer time (3 centuries!). And of course, now, without being disturbed for so long, they have a military force waaaay bigger than any army right now. Just wait, and watch the chapters ;)

EDIT: Also, you see the similarity between the names? (BlueStar, and  BlueComet? ^_^)
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Re: P.D.C. Commando Comments
« Reply #3 on: April 16, 2010, 07:05:01 PM »
Because I don't think I gave enough information in the Prolouge, I'm going to edit some more information on what's going on into it.

EDIT: I'm also going to extend it.
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